Talk:Last Gasp (Inside No. 9)

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Reviewer: Lemonade51 (talk · contribs) 17:34, 5 March 2014 (UTC)

Happy to review this.

• "It first aired on 26 February 2014 on BBC2." Should that be BBC Two? Would wikilink it too.
• "Critics were generally unimpressed with the episode. Bruce Dessau, Gerard Gilbert (The Independent) and Jack Seale (Radio Times), though generally complimentary of Inside No. 9, considered "Last Gasp" to be weaker than the previous three episodes", bit repetitive?
• "The episode was written around the time of the death of Michael Jackson and the death of Amy Winehouse", hmmm, the source doesn't say it was written around that time. Rather the idea of the episode was conceived.
• Brilliant work on the lead. Perhaps you could remove overly descriptive bits like "Later, Graham makes tea for Jan and Sally." and "Tamsin, sitting in her wheelchair, holds the balloon."
• "The acting in the episode was praised by Michael Hogan and Rachel Ward, writing in the Daily Telegraph, who said that", maybe you could tighten the prose here? Something like "The acting in the episode was praised by Michael Hogan and Rachel Ward, who wrote in The Daily Telegraph, "[w]ith their gift for comedy, vulnerability and pathos, Tamsin Grieg and Sophie Thompson (sister of Emma) deliver excellent performances"?
• "Last Gasp" was selected as comedy 'pick of the day' in The Express," Daily Express you mean? When The Express is wikilinked, a film comes up.
• Ref 3 was published on theguardian.com, not The Guardian newspaper.
• Ref 11 should be The Daily Telegraph
• Newspaper sources need location parameter filled in; in other words -- Ref 1, 7, 8, 11, 12, 13 and 15 are all London, Ref 14 is Glasgow.

No dabs or dead links. References do check out and the three images have sufficent licenses. In all a nice read and shall pass once comments have been addressed. Lemonade51 (talk) 17:34, 5 March 2014 (UTC)

Hi, thanks for the review. I've made the changes you suggested apart from two- I'd rather leave in the reference to Tamsin's wheelchair, as it keeps the reader in mind of her illness, which is an important part of the story, spawning a lot of rather dark jokes. I've also not added newspaper locations, as I feel that this is a legitimate difference in style; I've never listed newspaper locations, and, as far as I'm aware, there's nothing in the MOS which says that it's preferred. The general rule is that any citation style which might be used in academic work is acceptable, as long as there's consistency within the article. J Milburn (talk) 18:36, 5 March 2014 (UTC)

No problem, will pass. Lemonade51 (talk) 19:34, 5 March 2014 (UTC)

Thanks for the review, it's thoroughly appreciated. Some great catches in terms of mistakes I'd made- you clearly put in the effort. J Milburn (talk) 20:03, 5 March 2014 (UTC)

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