Talk:Return the Favor

Latest comment: 14 years ago by Lil-unique1 in topic GA Review
Good articleReturn the Favor has been listed as one of the Music good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it.
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October 26, 2010Good article nomineeListed

GA Review

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Reviewer: -- Lil_℧niquℇ №1 | talk2me 16:01, 19 September 2010 (UTC)Reply

I will begin the review shortly and aim to complete in next few days. A quick glance tells me this will pass. A more thorough review will be conducted and minor changes will need to be made. -- Lil_℧niquℇ №1 | talk2me 16:01, 19 September 2010 (UTC)Reply

  • Introduction and infobox
    • First paragraph's third sentance needs re-writing. e.g. "Return the Favor was released from Hilson'd debut album, In a Perfect World..., serving as the international second single whilst the urban single, 'Turning Me On' was released in the US."
  Done except using while instead of whilst.
    • In second paragraph, Timbaland calling the song bigger and better needs sourcing per WP:LEAD because its a quote.
Quote is paraphrased from the statement in the background which reads, ""I've got a song that I think's better than 'The Way I Are'. I think it's bigger."
    • noting the production and vocal similarities to "The Way I Are", preferring the latter stated track. → critics gave the song mixed reviews, noting that although "Return the Favors'"t production and vocals had similarities to "The Way I Are", critics preferred the latter.
 Not done As the current version seems better as the given example is very wordy and the although is never resolved "noting that although...critics preferred the latter.." and it is also very wordy. The current version is very concise and resolves "noting the production....preferring the latter."
    • whilst → while.
  Done
    • Exorbitant?
Exceeding the customary or appropriate limits in intensity, quality, amount, or size. A synonym of extravagant, lavish, overdue.
Please use a more common and widely used word. A lot of people will not know what exorbitant is. -- Lil_℧niquℇ №1 | talk2me 22:28, 29 October 2010 (UTC)Reply
  Done Candyo32 19:25, 16 October 2010 (UTC)Reply
  • Chart performance
    • This is not adequate. It needs copy editing and needs to be written in clearer prose. It makes no mention of the peaks of the single just its debuting positions. You've used Australia-charts for the Austrian chart commentary yet you could have used the austria chart reference.-- Lil_℧niquℇ №1 | talk2me 21:24, 27 September 2010 (UTC)Reply
I'm confused as all chart positions say "debuted and peaked" and if not that just "peaked." I re-wrote it a bit but it was kind of hard to figure out how to make it sound clearer than it was, unless you had any suggestions. Candyo32 19:25, 16 October 2010 (UTC)Reply
I'm afraid this still needs work. It is better but now reads as a list. Perhaps something along the lines of "Return the Favor" was most successful in Belgium reaching... It also reached X, Y and Z. However it experienced short/long chart runs only lasting..." -- Lil_℧niquℇ №1 | talk2me 22:28, 29 October 2010 (UTC)Reply
  • Music Video
    • Expand this to include a proper synopsis of what happens in the video because its not entirely clear.
Well the video has no plot, so the synopsis would be light. However what goes on is included in the first paragraph of the music video, which seems to suit rather than garbled commentary of wardrobe changes and movements which are already covered. 19:25, 16 October 2010 (UTC)
Resolved -- Lil_℧niquℇ №1 | talk2me 22:28, 29 October 2010 (UTC)Reply
  Done No filming information, but premiere date listed. Candyo32 19:25, 16 October 2010 (UTC)Reply
Resolved -- Lil_℧niquℇ №1 | talk2me 22:28, 29 October 2010 (UTC)Reply
I've tried for hours but I have no idea how to retrieve, locate, etc. anything for this song on the pandora archive. Candyo32 19:25, 16 October 2010 (UTC)Reply
You can find the pandora archives at [1] you can approximately work out from its Australian release date when it was likely to have charted. -- Lil_℧niquℇ №1 | talk2me 22:28, 29 October 2010 (UTC)Reply
No, it was only released on iTunes in the US since it was techincally only an international single. And now on iTunes in the US, idk about anywhere else, but once an album is release, the album version of the single succeeds the single release, and it is the one promoted and single version appears as if it never existed in the search. Candyo32 19:25, 16 October 2010 (UTC)Reply
Fairplay. -- Lil_℧niquℇ №1 | talk2me 22:28, 29 October 2010 (UTC)Reply

Are we close to having this review wrapped up? The review seems to be progressing pretty slowly. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 04:53, 26 October 2010 (UTC)Reply

Apologies I, the reviewer, have been away from wikipedia for real life stuffs. I will get back to it the next couple of days!¬ -- Lil_℧niquℇ №1 | talk2me 22:41, 26 October 2010 (UTC)Reply