Talk:The Pussycat Dolls Tour/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 08:39, 22 June 2022 (UTC)

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

I will get to work on this soon! --K. Peake 08:39, 22 June 2022 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

• Infobox looks good!
• The Pussycat Dolls → the Pussycat Dolls per MOS:THEMUSIC -  Task complete.
• "announced that the Dolls were reforming for" → "revealed that they were reforming for"  Task complete.
• "was involved in the conversations to reunite but decided to" → "declined to reunite but decided to" per the body, unless you can source actual discussion about a reunion  Task complete.
• "with ten dates across" → "with 10 dates across" per MOS:NUM  Task complete.
• "(Romania) and Super Bloom" → "(Romania), and Superbloom Festival" per the body  Task complete.
• "in January 2022 with the fate of the group" → "in January 2022 with the fate of the Pussycat Dolls"  Task complete.

Background

• Imgs look good!
• "The group performed for" → "The Pussycat Dolls performed for"  Task complete.
• "UK reality tv competition, The X Factor: Celebrity where" → "UK reality TV competition The X Factor: Celebrity, where"  Task complete.
• "a new song "React" and have since confirmed that new music is in production alongside" → "a new song titled "React" and subsequently confirmed new music being in production alongside"  Task complete.
• "member, Melody Thornton decided not to reunite with the group" → "member Melody Thornton decided not to reunite with them"  Task complete.
• "to tour the UK and Ireland," → "to tour the UK," per the source  Task complete.
• "noted that the group" → "noted that the Pussycat Dolls"  Task complete.
• "in the making" and tour was" → "in the making", and the tour was"  Task complete.
• The Brighton Pride appearance is not sourced as part of the tour  Task complete. - resolved with an additional source that demonstrates the date was added to the tour. it was also present on ticketmaster at the time but I can't retrospectively find the website as it has changed since.

Changes to scheduling

• "The tour's first leg was" → "The Pussycat Doll Tour's first leg was" per this being a new section  Task complete.
• "visiting 9 venues" → "visiting nine venues" per MOS:NUM  Task complete.
• Make sure you are invoking the correct source(s) for each sentence or continuous group of sentences  Task complete. reworded this section and added some further sources to support this section better
• "postponed for a year; with confirmation" → "postponed for a year, with confirmation"  Task complete.
• "As of April 2020, the tour" → "By April 2020, the tour"  Task complete.
• "in Dundee, Scotland before" → "in Dundee, Scotland, before"  Task complete.
• "Philippines, Japan and Oceania have" → "the Philippines, Japan, and Oceania, have"  Task complete.

I've done upto here Kyle Peake. I'll complete the rest over the next few days. I've left any comments or explanations in blue. ≫ Lil-Unique1 -{ Talk }- 21:58, 22 June 2022 (UTC)

Legal dispute and cancellation

• "Robin and Nicole, And so I" → "Robin and Nicole. And so I" on the quote box  Task complete.
• Pipe Los Angeles Superior Court to Los Angeles County Superior Court  Task complete.
• Pipe Memorandum of Understanding to Memorandum of understanding  Task complete.
• "Wyatt and Antin also" → "Wyatt, and Antin also"  Task complete.
• "5% reflecting that she left before the release of the group's second album," → "5%, reflecting that she left before the release of the group's second album"  Task complete.
• "that would handle future earning from the group" → "that would handle the future of the Pussycat Dolls"  Task complete.
• "the partnership with Antin" → "the partnership" with Antin" per the actual quote ending there  Task complete.
• "as well as accusing Antin of" → "as well as accusing her of"  Task complete.
• Any sentences with usage of direct quotes should have the appropriate ref(s) invoked at the end  Task complete.
• "on an Instagram story post." → "in an Instagram Story post." with the pipe per MOS:LINK2SECT  Task complete.
• "Not long after group members" → "Not long after, group members"  Task complete.
• "writing their own statement saying" → "writing their own statement, saying:"  Task complete.
• "sacrifices"... and later confirming" → "sacrifices" and further confirming"  Task complete.
• "of the group stating that" → "of the group, stating that"  Task complete.
• "will live on."" → "will live on"." per MOS:QUOTE  Task complete.

Arena shows

• [20][21][22][23][24][25][26][27][10] is too many refs together; move them to different areas of the title  Task complete.
• Pipe Mall of Asia Arena to SM Mall of Asia Arena  Task complete.
• Pipe Unimed Hall to Vibra São Paulo  Task complete.
• Are you sure the O2 Arena should really be stylized as you've done here since it is not styled as such in the actual article?  Task complete.
• Pipe The SSE Hydro to OVO Hydro  Task complete.

Festival and international shows

• Pipe Melbourne Arena to John Cain Arena  Task complete.
• Pipe Horncastle Arena to Christchurch Arena  Task complete.

Notes

• Again, should the O2 Arena be stylized how you have here?  Task complete.
• Pipe Melbourne Arena to John Cain Arena  Task complete.

Reception

• "On December 6, 2019," → "On November 6, 2019,"  Task complete.
• "on April 19 after" → "on April 19, 2020, after" however, the source backs up May dates and does not mention anything selling out  Task complete.

References

• Copyvio score looks pretty good at 35.5%!  Task complete.
• Cite Emirates 24/7 as publisher instead on ref 2  Not done - its a website published by Dubai Media Incorporated. Fixed the website to reflect.
• Cite Reuters as publisher instead on ref 6  Task complete.
• Remove the publisher from ref 7  Task complete.
• Cite Gay Times as work/website on ref 8  Task complete.
• Wikilink Ticketmaster on ref 11  Task complete.
• WP:OVERLINK of Metro on ref 12  Task complete.
• Cite BBC News as publisher instead on ref 14  Task complete.
• Huff Post → HuffPost on ref 16 with the wikilink  Task complete.
• Remove or replace ref 17 per WP:PAGESIX  Task complete. I had no idea about this so thank you
• Remove or replace ref 18 per WP:BUZZFEED  Task complete. I had no idea about this so thank you
• Wikilink OK! on ref 19  Task complete.
• Wikilink GMA Network on ref 20  Task complete.
• Cite News-ABS-CBN as publisher instead on ref 21 and pipe to ABS-CBN  Task complete.
• What exactly makes the second citation of ref 22 a reliable source? If you mean Tickets for Fun they're a Brazilian tickets retailer.
• Same as above for ref 23 and if kept, fix MOS:CAPS issues as above
• Fix MOS:CAPS issues with refs 24 33 38  Task complete.
• Remove the publisher from ref 25  Task complete.
• Remove wikilink on Ticketmaster for ref 26  Task complete.
• Remove or replace ref 27 per WP:METRO; the others are for direct quotes from members so should be fine  Task complete.
• bond → Bond on ref 29, also cite news.com.au as publisher instead with the wikilink  Task complete. - I have left in italics because News.com.au is a website. The publisher would be News Corp Australia
• Fix MOS:CAPS issues and WP:OVERLINK of AXS with refs 32 and 35  Task complete.
• The Press should only be linked once on ref 36  Task complete.
• Fix MOS:CAPS issues with ref 37 and fix WP:OVERLINK of Ticketmaster  Task complete.
• Fill in the citation for ref 42  Task complete.
• What exactly makes ref 45 a reliable source? If kept, fix MOS:CAPS issues.  Task complete. It is operated by Concrete Playground, a large digital periodical in Australia that garners 800,000 readers a month. Its founder Rich Fogarty is a renowned Australian marketeer. It received coverage in Australia marketing articles. It is also one of Australia's largest indie digital publishers according to Media Week.≫ Lil-Unique1 -{ Talk }- 20:17, 23 June 2022 (UTC)
• WP:OVERLINK of Ticketmaster on ref 46 and cite as publisher instead  Task complete. ≫ Lil-Unique1 -{ Talk }- 20:17, 23 June 2022 (UTC)

Final comments and verdict

•  On hold until all of the issues are fixed! --K. Peake 16:38, 22 June 2022 (UTC)
  • Hi @Kyle Peake: I believe everything has been addressed. Comments where I left them are in blue. ≫ Lil-Unique1 -{ Talk }- 20:19, 23 June 2022 (UTC)

• Lil-unique1 This article definitely has been improved now and I did some copy editing too, however the dates in reception are still not backed up as being in April 2020. --K. Peake 06:57, 24 June 2022 (UTC)

• Thanks Kyle Peake. I've been and changed that reference - I hadn't released that because of so many changes to the tour dates, the original source had degraded. ≫ Lil-Unique1 -{ Talk }- 10:24, 24 June 2022 (UTC)

• Lil-unique1 Kudos for finding the correct reference after that time, though I quickly changed it to publisher for you instead. ✓ Pass now, fabulous job especially on the pace! --K. Peake 11:17, 24 June 2022 (UTC)