Talk:1994–95 South Pacific cyclone season/GA1
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Reviewer: YE Tropical Cyclone 15:41, 21 June 2011 (UTC)
Here are my comments:
- "During the season the JTWC issued warnings on any tropical cyclone that was located between 160°E and 180° while the NPMOC issued warnings for tropical cyclones forming between 180° and the American coast." American cost? That was thousands of miles away? Change it to "South American" coast (assuming that's what you meant).
- I meant the American coast since the NPMOC issued warnings for the whole of the American coast including Mexico.Jason Rees (talk) 17:01, 21 June 2011 (UTC)
- "During the final days of 1994, Tropical Cyclone William developed to the northeast of American Samoa" wikilink American Samoa sicne most people donn't know where that is (I do not know much about it myself)
- "After William left the basin on January 5, the tropics remained quiet until March 6, when Severe Tropical Cyclone Violet became the strongest tropical cyclone of the season as it moved into the basin, before re-curving back into TCWC Brisbane's area of responsibility." Some people won't know what the tropics are. Reword it to either "the basin" or "the area" or "the region"
- Abbreviate kilometers out as km
- Nope per the MoS saying that it has to be spelled out when first used.Jason Rees (talk) 17:01, 21 June 2011 (UTC)
- "As Vania moved out of the Vanuatuan archipelago, the system moved towards the south before re-curving and moving towards the northwest." Wikilink the Vanuatuan archipelago sicne I nor most readers do not know where that is.
- "During the next day, as the depression moved to the southeast it gradually developed further, before the NPMOC designated the depression as Tropical Cyclone 05P with winds equivalent to a tropical depression.[3][2][15]" break this sentence up as it is very long
- Any more details about Violet?
- ive added a couple of lines to Violets section.Jason Rees (talk) 17:01, 21 June 2011 (UTC)
Nice article! YE Tropical Cyclone 15:41, 21 June 2011 (UTC)
- Passed. YE Tropical Cyclone 17:26, 21 June 2011 (UTC)